Wednesday, May 24, 2017


WALT use a technique to carefully craft our writing .

Make a copy, rename and start your writing on your copy.

Click on the url below and watch the short clip.

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Before you start writing Watch up till 1.15, think about what has happened? What has caused this? Why?

WALT write a descriptive piece of writing through the eyes of the boy.

Success Criteria
We need to focus on these things
  • Full stops, capital letters,
  • Paragraphs
  • We need to follow the sentence tools for our opening paragraphs.
To start with you will write a description of the first scene, use the show not tell technique to create thoughtful writing. You are writing through the eyes of the boy.                              These are our sentence tools today -
Sentence 1 - If, if, if, then
Sentence 2 - 3_ed
Sentence 3 - 2A
Sentence 4 - Where opener
Sentence 5 - Adverb opener
Sentence 6 - Short sentence
Sentence 7 - Tell: show 3 examples;
Sentence 8 - Short sentences
Here are some examples

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Go to this padlet Titanium and start writing your ideas, words feelings adjectives similes and metaphors.

Once this is completed you can publish it on your personal blog.

If I wasn't bullied if I wasn't as dum if I didn't have powers then none of this would of happened.I was scared  depressed and fared because of what I had  done.I had a nervous feeling in my body I am crouched down on a old dirty piece of paper.I stand up furiously off the old dirty piece of paper.I slowly walk past a classroom as one of the teacher looks at me and frighteningly  closes the door.I slowly walk nervously past the police.I hope on the red old rusty bike.As I screw up my face bite my yellow nails and nervously crouch down.I rush into my quiet little house.But something wasn't right but then...

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